I'm going to continue from my first snippet of "Vala Tops Raanan." If you would like to read snippet from "Gates of the Garden: Book Two" of Vala's Story series, click here. If you would like to read the snippet from the first part of "Vala Tops Raanan," click here. If you would like to read all of the 1st part of "Vala Tops Raanan," click here. And on Monday, part 2 of "Vala Tops Raanan" will go live; it's from that section that I grabbed the below snippet:
Vala's ordered Raanan onto his stomach...
Vala hopped to Raanan's side, holding her breath as he moved. Before he settled into place, she brought her hand down with a walloping spank across one cheek.
Raanan moaned into a pillow. He wriggled his hips, settling his cock underneath him.
Vala shoved her hand between Raanan's thighs and started slapping until they parted.
"Gods, please, Vala."
"Sh." Vala pressed Raanan's asscheeks apart.
Raanan cried into the pillow, wrapped his arms around it.
What does Vala have in store for Raanan next? :D
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lol got so excited to leave my comment that I hit "Sign out" rather than Publish, so I had to sign back in. ahem... This is what I wrote before:
ReplyDeleteOh no, is he crying because of how good it is, or because of how sharp her smack is because from my experience? Women's tiny hands make it a sharper hit.
ack at the logging out. You know, I've been pondering those questions actually, Thianna, because the short story that this snippet comes from 1504 words that works toward a fairly major sub-plot that I'd never meant to write. It was supposed to just be the hints that take place in the second book of my series. In terms of hierarchy, neither is behaving in the way their class decrees. He should be in control- he shouldn't be enjoying what she's doing to him. She shouldn't even be doing it; he never ordered her to play rough, just didn't order her not to. Definitely good question.
DeleteI love that he's crying into his pillow, and this spanking has barely begun. A truly delightful scene!
ReplyDeletethanks, Alice. yeah. there's also sorts of fun there. early in this short story, Vala is surprised to see cane marks on Raanan's chest :D yeah, he's totally out of it lol
DeleteI love how she's making him spread his thighs for this spanking. It's hot.
ReplyDeletethanks, Sue. oooo inner thigh spanking. yup. I wasn't feeling much sympathy for Raanan when I wrote that :D
DeleteOh Jebus! Why the inner thighs? Why, oh why, oh why? I cringed a little for Rannan in this case. I think it's a personal thing though... I have extremely sensitive inner thighs.
ReplyDeleteI love how he reaches for the pillow though :-)
heh because the inner thighs are close to other anatomy parts that he hopes, but doesn't hope she'll pay attention to :D but yeah, the pillow... considering they're in his bed :D
DeleteI enjoy an occasional switch to F/m on SatSpanks. Keeps us on our toes. When she reached between his thighs though, I was wondering where this was headed. LOL
ReplyDeleteme too, Maddie. Especially when I'm reading into my series (Vala's Story) and its stable of slaves, in the D/s scenes, I'm all over the place. Once I get into book 3 and beyond, I'll be able to offer a variety. I have quite a few M/m and F/f as well. but pssst :D- in the completion of the short story that this snippet comes from (that goes live on Monday), she jumps off the bed to look at his collection of butt plugs- Raanan is far more into m/m action and his direct submissives are both males.
DeleteOh I love this Joelle, you get me every week. HOT!
ReplyDeletethanks, Suzy. I'm glad I keep managing to offer good stuff :D
DeleteA nice switch from the usual M/f. Loved her spanking until he opened his legs. Excellent.
ReplyDeletethanks, Celeste. :D spanking the legs open- it's a favorite of mine.
DeleteOh, boy. Joelle, you definitely have me wanting to hear what's, um, entering the picture next!
ReplyDeletethanks, Emily :) well I gave anyone who was interested the link to the first part of the short story up in my intro and yeah, Monday the finish (with this snippet) goes live. My BR typed "awwwww" when she read Raanan's final words in the story :D
DeleteI'm not sure what's going to happen next, but I think he likes it.
ReplyDeleteyeah :) he could always say no :D
DeleteVery sexy snippet, Joelle;)
ReplyDeletethanks, Mary :)
DeleteVery sexy, Joelle!
ReplyDeleteGreat snippet!
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thanks, Katherine.
DeleteVery sexy, especially the pummeling until he openrd his legs for her.
ReplyDeletethanks, Daizie. yeah, he wasn't very good at predicting her wishes :D
DeleteOne can only imagine and know Raanan is not going to be happy.
ReplyDeleteThanks, great snippet.
Leigh (aka Sunny Girl)
thanks, Leigh. well it depends on what makes one happy :D
DeleteMy impression is that he likes this. Lots of hints to that effect. Subtle writing, Joelle.
ReplyDeletethanks, Patricia :) I was sure nervous writing this :D
DeleteSinful, for sure...
ReplyDeletethanks, Abbie :D sinful... and totally out of role :D
DeleteI was dying to know why he's crying, too!
ReplyDeleteI'd love to see if you think I actually answer that question with the full short- I just published it. I'm going to put the link up in the spanking group on fb since quite a few of you have commented. thanks for the comment
DeleteI like when the girl tops. What happens next ought to be very interesting.
ReplyDeleteyeah, I've had a lot of fun with Vala and Raanan in my series :D Did you see my Monday post, Angie? It was the "part 2" scene that this snippet came from, as well as containing the link to the "part 1" that last week's snippet came from?
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