8 or so sentences from writers who love
to spank or be spanked. Please enjoy my snippet and then move onto
the other hoppers- their links are at the bottom of this post.
Isn't it just so unfair when the dom wants the sub to explain aloud what he/she/ze did wrong? And of course since I'm writing Mommy/little girl age play, that had to figure into my spanking scene :D. If you'd like first check out these snippets: where Joey earns her spanking and then Mommy and Joey getting into position for the spanking.
But here, Joey is forced to speak; Mommy wants to know her little girl knows what she did wrong.
But here, Joey is forced to speak; Mommy wants to know her little girl knows what she did wrong.
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"I think you know why you were so rude to me. I want to hear you
say it."
I chewed on my bottom lip, trying to put together the words. "I..."
I fell silent. "I'm just anxious with Master and His swing shift
and um the slide," I babbled, mumbled.
"Maybe you should have asked for more help? Or maybe some
cuddles?"
I felt the first tear drop roll down my cheek. "Yes, Mommy, I
should've asked."
Cuddles always help. (and spanks) :) Great snippet
ReplyDeletethanks, Renee. cuddles are very good :)
DeleteHer manner does make her sound like a little girl. I can picture the scene clearly. Nicely done.
ReplyDeletethanks, Cara :) I'm glad others are seeing what I wanted to lay out so well
DeleteYou capture the feelings of each of your characters so well. And it is hard to verbalize what you've done wrong at any age.
ReplyDeletevery true, PK. What I want and what I've done wrong are both big struggles for me with my Master. thanks for the comment :)
DeleteI've been looking forward to a snippet from your age-play Joelle. From the excerpt it looks as though this is written in 1st person? ~grins~
ReplyDeleteThere is so much more I want to know. I'll be checking out some of those links to other snippets.
Lovely tease ヅ ツ ッ
yup, 1st person, LA. thanks for the comment, good to know you were looking forward to it. I have a few more snippets planned, for both this and the Seductive Studs and Sirens blog hops. I need to do some work on Vala's Story, but I hope to be getting back to "Mommy" after that and maybe have some more snippets to share, although they'll likely be out of order :D
Deletebtw, you've read some of my other posts on age play, right? the more academic ones? :D
DeleteWhat a lovely way to bring in authentic affection--"cuddles" evokes so many wonderful emotions.
ReplyDeletethanks, Emily :) yeah, cuddles is a nice word.
DeleteAw, it is always so difficult to admit your wrongdoing. Very nice.
ReplyDeletethanks, Leigh. yeah. especially thinking back to the scenario I built for how she earned the spanking :D When she snapped "no" was such a moment in writing :D
ReplyDeleteOoh, it's even harder to say why you've done something wrong. Joey definitely needs cuddles.
ReplyDeletethanks, Johnna. It'll be great when I finish this and get it published for you all to read :D yup, cuddles are important through out the book :)
DeleteAsking for cuddles is nearly always a good thing to do. Fictional mommies are particularly good with those. :)
ReplyDeletethanks for the comment, Patricia. Yup, Mara's a good cuddler :D
DeleteI love the way these two characters interact. Cuddles is indeed the perfect word. It conveys much more than a simple hug. Love the snippet, Joelle.
ReplyDeletethanks, Kathryn. Definitely wanted a bigger picture than a hug. To me, cuddles when talking two adults, means one partner on the lap of the other. Good for AP :)
DeleteSome people are not very good at asking for what they want. It's always good when they have a mommy or daddy who knows what they need.
ReplyDeleteLove these snippets. Keep 'em comin'!
thanks, Normandie. well poor Joey is dealing with her Master's swing shift, so yes, they agreed she needed a mommy :D
DeleteVery nice, cuddles go a long way to making a little girl feel better.
ReplyDeletethanks, Pooky. cuddles are way way good
DeleteAw. Poor girl. I hope Mommy isn't too strict with her.
ReplyDeletethanks, Angie :) no, I don't think I wrote Mommy too strict, although she is definitely teaching a lesson. I mean, what good is it for Mommy to come visit to help with Master's shift change if Joey's not going to say she needs help?
DeleteLOVE LOVE. Yes, indeed, she SHOULD have asked! :P
ReplyDelete<3 ageplay
Bella x
thanks for the comment, Bella. yeah, it's a good line :)
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